Assignment 15

To be honest, I feel like I have not achieved the goals that I wanted to succeed in. I still see no improvements in the way I write because the same corrections are seen on my essays. Now that I am familiar with college level work I can probably find other ways on helping myself improve my skills

I still need to work on creating a strong thesis and being specific. Seeing my grades for all the essays, I feel like I am farther than what I thought to achieve the goal I wanted to succeed in. I feel like having more "hands on training" will do me good.

Assignment 14

• For my final portfolio, I chose to revise my ad analysis essay. I chose to revise this because I thought that it would be easier to rewrite. The strengths of my ad analysis would be describing the image that I am trying to show my audience. However I lacked enough specifications and elaborating more on a subject that I mention. Another weakness that I tend to repeat every time is my thesis statement.
• To effectively revise my essay, I am going work on my thesis statement and elaborating more on my essay. Being specific is what I am not good at. Even if though that I was pretty clear and specific, it turns out to be the opposite of what I expect. 

Assignment 13

 The essay that I liked writing the most would probably be the fourth assignment that the class had to do. the topic was a much easier and it was easy for me to be more organized. To prepare writing I can use a chart and have a list of evidences and supporting ideas and divide each ideas into paragraphs to create the essay. It was almost as easy as a high school essay where you don't really have to think and be very critical about what you should have explaining a specific topic just like the advertisement analysis essay.

 Writing the fourth assignment was the one I liked most because I am familiar with the structure of the whole essay. It is basically just seeing both sides of the argument and giving supporting ideas to each main idea. there was no research to be done. There was also no specific item that was needed to base the essay on such as an article, image, or a story about an essay you wrote. it is almost like a freestyle writing with a topic.

Assignment 11

• For the third assignment, I had to analyze "Should the Obama Generation Drop Out?" In that essay, The writer lacked in trustworthiness. There was no sources that was mentioned for the facts that he states. This taught me to not state anything examples that may require proof or resources to show my readers where I got the information from such as, "10 to 20% of students drop out in their high school senior year." (Just an example)
•  The writer used words that was judgmental and made him seem biased and unprofessional. The writer used terms such as, "Except for the freakishly gifted," or "too dumb." On my argument essay, I tried to not use such words so I don't come out as judgmental.
• He also rarely discussed the other side of the argument and focused on explaining his position. He didn't consider both sides of the argument. On my essay, I considered both sides. I gave equal amounts of evidence on both positions. 

Assignment 10

• The peer review that we do in class is good enough in my opinion. It's quick, simple and easy. Nothing to complain about.
• Strengths - My strengths as a peer reviewer would probably be on the spelling and where to put comas or periods or quotation marks. Weaknesses - I just quickly review the essay instead of reading carefully and finding unnoticeable mistakes and that I don't really put a lot of input into the peer review process.
• My ideal peer review process would be a one-on-one kind of thing. I prefer to have my essay reviewed by my teacher/professor and edit the essay paragraph by paragraph. Obviously I would prefer a smaller group to be more helpful because a larger group is a bit distracting. I do feel that we have more than enough time for peer reviews.  

Assignment 9

-In my writing, I tend to repeat information several times. On the recent paper that I did for my Communications class, I wrote the same information in two different paragraphs but it was rephrased. This causes the length of my essay to be shorter and it unable me to explain other points that would be worth writing about.

-Another error that I notice is that I am not very specific about a point that I state in my essay. Another example from my Communication essay was that I noticed that my professor wrote, "needs development/be more specific" twice. I often do not explain enough about the subject I am talking about. This causes confusion for my readers

-My last error that I often see on my writing is that I explain and say too much information without getting straight to the point. This error is combined with repeating information because I write the same thing over and over again and still I would be unable to get to the point. The sentences are just supporting the main idea of the paragraph but I would not state the main idea. This can also cause confusion and it can affect the audiences' lack of interest on the essay.

Assignment 8

  For the next writing assignment, I chose to write my essay on the article, "Should the Obama Generation Drop Out?" I chose this article because this was probably the most appealing topic for me. On the news there was always some news about related topics to this article. However I did a really bad thing of just picking one out of the five articles that was provided. I did read the first 3 paragraphs at least of each article to get an idea of what the article is about (I did not have much time to really go through all the articles).
  
  The debate on whether children should go to college can be endless. One side of this argument is that when applying for a job, it really depends on what the person can contribute to their work. The other side of the argument would be children still needs to attend post-secondary education to gain knowledge and to learn more about the field that they chose to major in and it is very helpful.






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